now i'm not at all an animation artist, but i'll give it the best critique i can as far as my skills go. c:
firstly, i think the flow is great. you've done a very nice job as far as i can tell. all of your drawing is very nicely done as well.
however, i did notice a couple of things. and the first thing i noticed, i can't decide if it really bothers me or not, but i'll point it out anyway. the fact that the most everything is transparent. like you can see the other trees through the flower and the lumber jack and what not. but again, i haven't decided if it bothers me or not. haha.
the second thing is, and i could be off on this as well. but the lumberjack is cutting from the left at the start but he steps on the flower from the right at the end. i didn't know if maybe there were two men in the forest...?
overall i think this is super cute...even though the flower dies at the end. but it really kind of made me laugh as horrible as that is. haha. but very nicely done. c:
Well, the idea was that there were several lumberjacks out there. The problem though was that I had a deadline to reach, and I was afraid my professors wouldn't think one animation was enough work for a senior project (because in our Senior classes, the students choose what they will work on and finish by the end, and the professors see if it is a suitable amount of work for Seniors, and they judge the work based on the amount of work, if they were able to complete it, and the work quality in general), so I was actually working on three projects (two animations and a few illustrations).
So, I ended up making cuts to this (my original idea was over a minute and a half long). The idea was that there were lots of lumberjacks out there, and the one that stepped on the flower was just another one who was around. That one lumberjack ended up taking more time than I thought (and I'm not satisfied with how he finally ended up). That's why I didn't show the one cutting the tree that threatened the flower, and just showed the axe instead.
I could add to it now, but I don't have a capture station, or anything to capture the animation in general. I was using the school's equipment, and I really don't want to go back and use their equipment (though I probably should, and have been thinking about doing so).
well that's kind of what i figured after i thought about it for a little while.
and i personally feel like you did a nice job on the lumberjack. i think maybe some of the lines on his clothes might been too much or needed to be drawn a different way but it isn't that noticeable at all. since you don't really see him for that long. haha.
but you still did a very lovely job. especially with your time limit and what not.
and i would certainly go use their equipment! if you like doing this stuff. and i wouldn't want to get out of practice